Formal Introductory Letter to Professor Blackstone
Dear Professor Blackstone,
Subject: Introduction Email for UCS1001 - S10
I am Chanelle Ong and I am writing this email to introduce myself as a student in your UCS1001-S10 module. I graduated in 2024 from Ngee Ann Polytechnic in Real Estate Business. During my studies, I discovered my passion for engineering through Autodesk BIM [Building Information Modeling] module in my second year. This experience allowed me to combine both creativity and technical expertise which pushed me to pursue engineering. Since then, I’ve developed skills in rendering and designing buildings which boosts my interest in this field.
One of my communication strengths is active listening. As the president of the BIM Club, I’ve learned the importance of listening to my members’ suggestions and feedback, which allows me to make informed decisions and improve BIM-related events I host. This skill has also helped me foster trust and collaboration within my team.
One area of improvement is my confidence in presenting. I often struggle with stuttering, misreading words, and overusing fillers like “um” and “uh.” These habits have affected my ability to present ideas clearly and confidently. However, I see this module as an opportunity to practice and improve my pronunciation, delivery, and overall confidence when presenting and speaking.
I have two goals that I want to achieve in this module. First, I aim to improve my ability to present ideas with clarity and confidence. Second, I want to develop the skill of adapting my communication style that suits the audience faced alongside its context. For instance, I tend to struggle to switch between casual and professional communications, and I hope to use this module to refine those skills.
What makes me unique is the ability to tackle challenges with precision and creativity. For example, I’ve developed an interest in making Japanese cuisine which requires me to carefully plan, be attentive to details and creativity to add my personal twist to recipes. This skill has brought over to how I tackle questions in engineering problems. I break down complex questions into manageable parts as a way to tackle and find a solution to those questions.
Thank you for taking the time to read my introduction. I look forward to learning and growing in your class.
Best Regards,
Chanelle Ong
Student of UCS1001 - S10
Latest Edit: 7/2/2025
Note:
Letters of those I've responded to are, Vellyn, Aarifeen, Tristal, Benjamin and Aravind
The letter is well-written and it provides a clear introduction, explaining your background, strengths, and goals. You even shared specific examples, such as leadership roles in the BIM Club and your interest in cooking Japanese food, which help make your story more personal and interesting. You have a distinct flow in the letter which describes your strengths, like active listening, and areas you want to improve, such as confidence in presenting. You also sets clear goals for the course, showing your commitment for growth. However, you could make a stronger connection between the skills she’s gained outside of class and how they will help her in UCS1001. The language used is professional, but small changes in phrasing, like replacing “boosts my interest” with “has further fueled my interest,” could make it sound smoother.
ReplyDeleteHello Tristal!
DeleteThank you so much for your feedback. I really appreciate that you found my humble letter interesting to read. I would like to thank you for the feedback that you have given.
I am proud to say that the letter has been further improved to fit the style of my writing while also remained professional.
Hope we can do this again!
Best Regards,
Chanelle
Good job on the introduction email Chanell! Your email is clear and well-structured, explaining and sharing with me your background, strengths, and goals. Being the president of the BIM club, i would expect you to teach me how to be as good as you in BIM modelling. However, your interest in Japanese cuisine, could be more relevant to school / Civil Engineering. In addition, improving transitions between paragraphs and addressing minor grammatical errors will make your email clearer and improve its flow.
ReplyDeleteGreetings, Aarifeen.
DeleteThank you so much for the feedback! I am very appreciative of the time and effort you've put into writing and posting your comments under my post. I hope you don't have that high expectations of me as a BIM president, I still got a lot more to learn, haha. Regarding your feedback, I am proud to say that I have touched up on the details you have mentioned and will be happy if you read them again.
Hope we can do this again.
Best Regards,
Chanelle
Hi Chanelle!
ReplyDeleteI find your introduction very well written and organized. You gave clear comments of what makes you have a growing interest in civil engineering and why you chose this course. Each paragraph flows nicely with different subjects from your growing interests for civil engineering, to your strengths, weakness, goals, and eventually your own distinctive personality.
Overall, the email is well written, just a few mistakes of grammatical error.
Hello Vel!
DeleteThank you for taking your time to think, write and post your feedback. To me, every feedback is precious as it provides a good learning opportunity to improve my writing. I am honored that you enjoyed and was impressed with my introduction, interest and the reason behind joining Civil Engineering.
I have heard of your feedback regarding gramatical errors and have improved on those. I am proud to showcase them now and hope you would take the time to check it out and provide the same dedicated feedback as you did last time.
I hope we can do this again!
Best Regards,
Chanelle
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ReplyDeleteDear Chanelle,
ReplyDeleteThank you for this well developed and informative letter. You have addressed all the areas of the brief, and you've done so while sharing relevant and interesting details.
You mention, for example, that you have developed an interest in CVE, thanks to being able to study an "Autodesk BIM [Building Information Modeling] module." You connect your evolving interest to the way BIM allows for combining creativity and technical expertise. I also see the idea of creativity popping up in other parts of this post's discussion, and I note that you now head the BIM club. Kudos to you for your developing passions!
You also clearly share on your comms skills strength, a weakness, your aims, and you state that having "the ability to tackle challenges with precision and creativity" may distinguish you from others. I really appreciate that idea, and it's cool how a focus on creative thinking seems to imbue so much of who you are. That is certainly a way of approaching the world that will serve you well in all walks of life.
In ters of language, this letter is fluent, but there is one odd sentence fragment: "By breaking down questions into manageable parts and adapt my learning methods to find solutions."
To wrap up, I'm very happy to be accompanying you at this stage of your learning journey, and I look forward to learning more from you in the coming weeks.
Best wishes,
Brad
Dear Professor Blackstone,
DeleteThank you so much for reading my letter. I am pleased and happy to know that you've noticed my unique way of posting throughout the lifetime of this blog.
I intend to pursue my passions further through the upcoming reader's response analysis.
I am glad that my letter is clear, precise and to your liking. I appreciate the feedback and will be enhancing the letter once blogspot is smooth on my end.
Looking forward to your feedback soon!
Best regards,
Chanelle
Thank you!
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